My Father 我的父亲

There is always a brilliant image living in my heart. That is my dear father. Seen through the eyes of many other people, father seems to be a very ordinary person. But he is quite extraordinary in my eyes, I have never lost my wonder at his good-personalities such as diligence, devotion, care, optimism ever since my childhood.Being a farmer, father works very hard in the fields all the year round. He works from dawn till dusk every day and even till midnight when it is the harvest season. He seldom enjoys leisure with other farmers even if the farm work is not much. He chooses to live a busy life with reluctance to stop for a while.
Father devotes all himself to our family. As we are poor, he always tries his best to support our family and afford the tuitions for my brother and me. For the whole family, for brother and me, he never stops working laboriously in the fields throughout the year. Now he has got a wrinkled face and white hair because of excessive hard work, looking much older and weaker than any other person of his age. In spite of all this, father never complains to us. It is his full devotion that we're living a better life now. It is his full devotion that both my brother and I are able to study at college.Father shows much care to us children and my mother as well. Whenever there is any delicious food on the table, he just leaves it to us while he takes the simple one himself. If my brother and I fall ill, he will not hesitate a moment to get some medicine for us or take us to see the doctor. My mother suffers a bad disease. Father looks after her very carefully. He never lets mother do any heavy work both at home and in the field. Mother appreciates him m much that she often praises him as a model husband before others.
Father is a person full of optimism. He never complains about our poor life. He is never frustrated by trouble. He often tells us that everything will be all right if we have enough confidence in life. Due to his optimism, we are all confident to face our life and work.
We all think that father is not in the least an ordinary man. He plays an extraordinary role in my family. We can't have anything without him. Now I'm pursuing further studies at college far away from father. I miss him very much. And I often see him in my dreams. His great image is deeply carved in my mind.我父亲的光辉形象永远是一种生活在我的心里吧.”那是我亲爱的爸爸.在许多其他人的眼中,父亲似乎是一个很普通的人.但在我的眼里他很特别,自从我的童年他在我眼中一直都是勤奋、敬业、保健、乐观.
作为一个农民,父亲在田里工作很努力.收获的季节，他每天从早到晚工作,直到午夜时.他很少像其他的农民享受休闲,即使在农场工作不多的时候.他选择一个繁忙的生活不情愿停下来。
父亲为了我们这个家奉献了他的全部.当我们贫穷时,他总是尽自己最大的努力来支持我们的家庭和支付我哥哥和我的学费.为整个家庭,为哥哥和我,他总是不停地在地里工作一整年.现在他因为过度辛勤工作已经有了一个满是皱纹的脸和白色毛发,岁,比任何其他与他相同的年龄的人.虽有这一切的事,父亲从不抱怨.这是他的全部奉献,我们正处在一个更好的生活.这是他的全部奉献,我的兄弟和我都能在大学读书。
父亲十分关心我们，和我母亲一样.每当有什么好吃的食物放在桌子上,他只是让我们吃自己吃少点.如果我和我兄弟生病,他会毫不犹豫地让拿些药给我们或带我们去看医生.我的母亲受严重的疾病.父亲照料得很认真.他从不让妈妈在家里和田间做什么繁重的工作.感谢他的母亲,她经常在别人面前称赞他为模范丈夫。
父亲是一个十分乐观的人.他从不抱怨我们贫穷的生活.他从未灰心丧气.他经常告诉我们,一切都会好起来的,如果我们有足够的信心.由于他的乐观,我们都是自信的面对我们的生活和工作。我们都认为,父亲是不平凡的人.他在我的家庭中具有非常重要的作用.我们能不能有什么东西.现在我继续进修大学远离的父亲.我怀念他.我经常看到他在我的梦.他的伟大的形象深深刻在我的脑海里.
评语： 本文作者以朴实的语言充满感情地刻画了父亲的不平凡的形象，分别从四个不同的角度描述了父亲的勤劳、奉献、关爱和乐观。内容真实感人，行文简洁流畅，结构清晰，组织有条有理，首尾呼应，给读者以强烈的感染力。 作者用词简洁精确，并能很好地尝试一些新学的词汇及表达，使简洁的行。文更为生动。作者没有运用太多复杂的句式，但能适当运用介词短语、分词结构、强调及重复的手法，恰到好处 地突出了行文句式的变化，使文章更耐读。